Tuesday, 16 February 2016

the apple

2 comments:

Anonymous said...

I enjoyed reading your story and you have used your own ideas to tell the story. You have made an effort to edit your own work. Next time keep trying to use words that give lots of detail and will make your story more interesting. Well done!

Anonymous said...

You have worked well on this story with your partner Vinuth. Next time you can work on your editing skills.

Miss H